Your writing English is pretty good. However, while writing an essay choosing the words is very important and of course, to write them correctly and not repeating them too many times. You tried hard , I believe .Except some spelling mistakes and very tiny grammar points your essay is well-done!
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4 years ago viewed 1359 times Points: Coherence: 4/5 Vocabulary: 4/5 Grammer: 4/5 Unity: 5/5 Average Point: 4.25/5