Generally, the essay is well-built. However there are some singular-plural word mistakes, and also grammar errors.On the other hand, You have chosen suaitable and meaningful words. The mistakes are so small but they affect the unity of the essay, the unity of the essay is good ,though. You should also be careful enough while using a preposition.
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6 years ago viewed 2248 times Points: Coherence: 4/5 Vocabulary: 3/5 Grammer: 3/5 Unity: 3/5 Average Point: 3.25/5