Teacher's comment:
You should improve your vocabulary and grammar. You should use more conjunctions and while choosing them please choose the formal ones, such as: therefore instead of so.
Essay Info: Word Count 143 added
6 years ago viewed 1675 times Points: Coherence: 3/5 Vocabulary: 2/5 Grammer: 2/5 Unity: 3/5 Average Point: 2.5/5